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04 March, 2010

I Feel Caged!


I feel caged, I feel caught
I feel restless though in thought...
A throbbing numbness within
Tempting to desire, daring to sin!

I feign black, I act white
A clear haze, though not in sight...
I look around for whiter black clouds
Poking and ruffling my surfacing shrouds!

I dance with sanity, settling the insane
Basking in the glory, wilting in the shame...
I try to sew or make sense of my urges
Striving within old boundaries for new merges!

I feel fingers at my windpipe
Dismay for the droop in the ripe...
Un-feeling the verity of being parched in any rain
I’ve learnt to fake-smile through any pain!

Every day I have half lived and half died
Half self crib and half self chide...
Would I soon become a faded bloom?
Would I soon portray the lively doom?

I am searching for me and what I want
Thirsting for truth while aching with doubt
I erase the lost victories and remember the forgotten
Is it possible to expect life growing from the rotten?

I feel caged I feel caught
I feel this, that and what not!
I give I want, I fulfil I desire
I animate I freeze, I give up and again aspire!

29 comments:

Hopeless Romantic said...

:)

*speechless*

Amit

suruchi said...

Thanks Amit...
I was half-scared that this was really crappy...
Now I am just one third scared;-)
Hugs:-)

shikha said...

as always,fabulous !!!
no its not crappy at all...u r gifted n u better believe me

Amrit said...

:)

kya baatan ji kya baatan ji

suruchi said...

@Shiks...ji bilkul
I am soooooooooooooo gifted...I have awesome friends like u guys....
muwaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah:-)

@Amrit....
Thank u hain ji...:-)
Tussi vi great ho:-)

Madhu said...

u write well..though i aint a fan of poetry...i kinda like readable and understandable ones..!

suruchi said...

Thanksssssssssss madhu:-)
I am glad mine was readable n understandable:-)

Anonymous said...

Here's one for you, inspired by your poetic impressions. I have written this to drive you out of the blues. May God grant you all peace and happiness...:)

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Free her from the cage
Let go of the rage
Let her soar high
Deep into the sky

Let life win
Don't consign it to a bin
Inconvenience of truth to share
God reach out and care

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suruchi said...

Thank u soooooooooo much...
U are kind beyond measure with me...
And great poetic talent there;-)
God bless us both:-))

Ria said...

wow!!really loved the way its been written. Btw, i dropped in from sulagna's blog.

sulagna ™ said...

kya baat hai su..look anonymous people also love writing back after reading your thoughts...go girl go!!!

sobhit said...

wah bhai wah.... in dis case wah behen wah... naaaaaaa.. i mean wah wah.. gues dat wud do... :P :P not a big fan of poetry 4 hv2 go in deep 2 understnd it n my punny brains r not capcble f doin dat.. but sure ur simple n clear words gt sm deep meaning 2 dem... summarising lyf n tyms in such short poem is commandble... gud goin woman... tryin diff stuff n not stickin 2d usual stuff u write .. appreciate dat :P :P...chalo wnt rahtr cant say much yaha badi badi baatein ho ri hai will leave d expert lyk u tk care f all dis... gud read tho

Rahul Khatri said...

ahem...kya hua sc...serious sherious??hmm?? tussi A2 hi ho na??

nicely written...though to understand certain words, dic nikalni padegi, but nicely written...ek dukhi aatma ki dukh bhari kahani...sob sob...btw...agar kabhi senti ho rahe ho...remember I'm ther okay!!he he;):))

suruchi said...

@Ria...thanks for dropping by via Sulagna...she's a sweetheart...and I am glad u liked me after having read her...coz I think she's fab:-)
Keep coming:-)

suruchi said...

Hey Su...
Thanks gurl...ek magar secret bataaon kya...kuch anonymous people are often not so anonymous...this is one such case:-)
I am going n going...but where am I going...hehe...lols
Big hugs to u as always:-)

suruchi said...

@Sobhit...thank u bhai thank u...:-)
It's great to know that u liked it...coz this is not your typical read...hence I soooooooo appreciate the appreciation here...

Big hugs for this:-)
I always try to write different stuff...at least I prefer not to go back to the same genre within 3-4 posts...aage whatever comes to my little brain here:-)

N no expert year..just some tumbling thoughts:-)

suruchi said...

@Rahul...yup aaaj serious sherious...tussi itne cute kaise ho by the way...loved the "serious-sherious";-)

Kabhi kabhi dikha dena chahiye public ko ke apne pass bhi thode bahut brains hain;-)

Dukhi aatma ke dukh bhari kahani, nataunki ke zubaani;-)

N I know u'll always be there...it goes without saying...
Bade waale jhappiiiiiiiiiiiiiis:-)

storm said...

Nice :)

suruchi said...

Storm...thanks:-))

Shady said...

I feel caged I feel caught
I feel this, that and what not!
I give I want, I fulfil I desire
I animate I freeze, I give up and again aspire!


Amazingly beautiful >> this came from the heart and rest you had to think ;)

suruchi said...

Shady...thanks...
I personally loved the closing lines more too than the rest of them...
:-))

P.S. And u know what happens when 'I' think;-)

Nicole said...

beautiful poem...I like(s) it very much ji...(btw before I read this I read the thing about how you hate people 'screwing' Englees) Oh! Btw am adding you on fb...if you don't mind miss!!

suruchi said...

Hey Nicole...thankssssssss
no yaar I don't hate people screwing English...I screw it myself most of the time...I guess I hate it when the screwing is not done by me;-)
Lolzzzzzzzzzz

Hey would love to have u on fb as a friend...but I don't see a friend request there...chalo resend pls...I guess it got lost somewhere...

N since I read on ur blog that a hug is all u need*among 7 other things*a hug is here for u
Hugsssssssssssssss:-)

Nicole said...

Thank u thank u ji

Anonymous said...

What entertaining phrase

Anonymous said...

What do you mean?

Anonymous said...

In it something is. Thanks for the help in this question, the easier, the better ?

Anonymous said...

Thanks for an explanation.

Anonymous said...

What touching words :)

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